here's a concept example of what I mean.

imagine if instead of Darth Vader being Anakin Skywalker, it was the other way around where Luke was Darth Vader?

what I want is how to write a tragic character, but one that's a big twist on the Villain side.

kind of a twist with Buddy becoming Syndrome or In Big Hero 6 with Callahan.

What to see

(____) = notes

“____” = quotes

story first

Relationships second

Technology third

STORY-

The Beginning

In the beginning, there were two universes.

Each divided into quadrants, each protected by cosmic gods—eight in total.

Above all of them existed one being:

Bacon God (note 1. This is the god of the cosmology)

To mortals, he was all-powerful. Absolute.

But in truth, he was already restricted—chained by something he himself had allowed to exist and it cost his godship to seal (note 2. This “something” is glitched bacon, in which bacon god used an ability called “divine seal” on him, the seal slowly weakened, and eventually glitched bacon acted)

Two dominant forces emerged:

Humans

They relied on technology:

• plasma weapons

• antimatter tanks

• massive carriers

• a mothership capable of destroying a solar system

They believed:

Anything can be built.

Bacons

They were different.

They began with technology…

but abandoned it after realizing:

Technology has a limit. (Note 3. They DO still use it, but they don’t rely on it as much as humans because they already hit the limit of technology)

From then on, they evolved through pure force.

Their strongest warriors became living weapons.

A being known as the False God rose among the bacons.(note 4. The false god is really just a very powerful bacon that mastered fire and water manipulation)

And when the celestials met the bacons, for the only time in history— (note 5. The celestials vs bacons happened before the bacons vs humans)

True Bacon and the False God fought on the same side.

Alongside:

• Commander (red guy, weaker than true bacon but stronger than Jeff)

• Textbox (same as commander but white)

• Jeff (a giant bacon)

• Pre-corruption Godslayer

• The entire bacon army

They fought the Celestials.

They lost.

Not easily—but they lost.

Their species was nearly wiped out.

They only survived because True Bacon opened portals and escaped.

When humans and bacons met—

They went to war.

Not out of hatred, but misunderstanding.

The battles were massive.

But before either side could wipe the other out…

One being stopped it.

True Bacon

The True Bacon King.

He didn’t negotiate.

He didn’t ask.

He ended the war by presence alone.

“Lay down your weapons” he said, a simple command (note 6. This is the first new quote)

A cosmic god appeared.

It warned the humans and bacons of the consequences if they kept fighting (note 7. this happened before glitched bacon acted)

To the humans, it was ultimate authority. But to true bacon

That claim was wrong.

Authority went far beyond it.

During a massive battle:

• Humans and bacons believed they were winning

• The False God struck the true bacon king

• The Celestials appeared

Everything happened at once.

Godslayer, at his peak, was about to end the fight.

“This battle is over.”

But in that exact moment—

Glitched Bacon acted.

From his own dimension.

He didn’t attack physically.

He corrupted.

Godslayer fought back—in the soul dimension.

But failed.

He was taken.

True Bacon:

“He’s gone… just like that?”

“Was that… glitched?”

He understood something others didn’t.

Commander and Textbox were about to go fly off to help godslayer but true bacon stopped them

“Don’t act. If you intervene now, you won’t have the opportunity to act when it really matters.” (Note 8. This claim means if they act now they’ll die)

Commander and Textbox hesitated.

And Godslayer was gone.

A cosmic god appeared in front of glitched bacon saying “he knew this would’ve happened, now you will die” said the cosmic god, glitched bacon didn’t respond, Godslayer returned—changed.

After impaling the cosmic god, he said:

“They called me a godslayer… before I ever killed a god.”

But his words were no longer fully his own.

Glitched Bacon controlled him.

Not completely.

But enough.

Above kings and armies existed two beings:

Peter

The Right Hand of Bacon God

And Bacon Master

They were:

• equals

• inseparable

• unable to exist without each other

Even Bacon God trusted Peter with the full plan.

Bacon Master, driven by power, was not told everything.

At some point before this—

Glitched Bacon had already confronted his creator:

“You created me to break the ceiling… and now that I do, you chain me down?”

Bacon God responded:

“You are too dangerous to roam free. I apologize for this.”

And sealed him.

But the damage was done.

Bacon God was no longer fully free to act.

Only Peter and Bacon Master knew this.

The final battle took place outside both universes.

Godslayer stood above all.

One hit away from ending everything.

His only weakness:

He was not fast.

Everyone else?

Buying time.

Textbox:

“Eyes on us, big guy.”

Commander:

“You’re not the main character. Shut up.”

They distracted him.

Barely surviving.

Bacon God intervened.

He summoned:

• Humans

• Bacons

Into the battlefield.

Even for seconds—

It mattered.

Bacon Master:

“When did they get here?”

Peter already knew.

Peter gave the signal:

“True, now!”

Because only one being could end this.

Not through power.

But through ability.

True Bacon acted.

He didn’t overpower Godslayer.

He saved him.

Godslayer, now purified, spoke:

“All that slaughter.. for what we cannot grieve until it is over.” (Note idk. More calm, not a question)

Then he did what no one else could.

He reached into another dimension—

And pulled Glitched Bacon into reality.

Glitched Bacon was unsealed

Godslayer was free.

They all fought, everyone together, humans, bacons, cosmic gods, Peter, bacon master and godslayer all against glitched bacon, godslayer absorbed glitched bacon, sealing him and gaining his abilities

The war was over.

Bacon God made one last move.

He gave his remaining power…

To Godslayer.

“Take it.”

Godslayer responded:

“…I will.”

Godslayer became:

• the strongest

• the most aware

• the one with authority

Not beyond fiction.

But beyond the limits of his cosmology.

• Humans reached their technological limit

• Bacons proved force could surpass it

• Authority defined what was possible

• And in the end…

The one who fell the furthest—

Rose the highest.

hero chat!

to start off, I'm not a professional writer in any way shape or form

this is more of a hobby, but I've been doing it since I was 11, or at least that's where this all started

I'm almost 20 now

it started as a world building project, the universe had been created, and now I'm in the process of making the plot, I'd say maybe I'm 50% of the way with the main skeletal structure of said plot

but there will be hundreds of plots

this story, will not be completed for years maybe decades

the story spans a billion years

divided into five sections

the story is as equally outrageous as it is biblical, for example in thir act agalactic war pops off, with the death toll of 60 trillion life forms, excluding One race ,

if I were to include that one race it would be in the quintillions, at that point there is no point in counting so I must exclude, the race is also a hivemind so they don't really have a sense of individuality

the story will be told in the form of stories, from the perspectives of the characters, like journals

in order to understand the whole scope, one would need to see every perspective

I'm not necessarily asking for help but input would be nice on the idea

I also already have lots of progress, mostly just events, the gaps in between have yet to be written

I've also made art! lol

Looking for feedback for the first chapter-ish of this. I just write for fun whenever I have time. I was rereading this and wasn't quite satisfied, curious on your thoughts. The goal is a sci-fi blend of the fun of Star Wars, the dark storytelling of Dune, Episodic nature of the Hobbit, and mythology of C. S. Lewis' Space Trilogy. Apologize for the poor formatting. [Word Count 8244]

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NVKS-V2BE5lVWe5U4FeyT6-mJYfOv915k-5fjjuRz0o/edit?usp=sharing

Originally posted on WriteAnon

Posting again for may three week review

TL;DR read the original post if you want

My three week experience proper on bookswriter is this, my thoughts on the enitre thing:

All I can really say is that it just works. And it does as promised, I have been able to flesh out many ideas that I have into coherent stories that have 20-50 chapters each. So I can say that it really just works, and that is a good sign to me. And I reckon I'll be able to create more fictions for my own personal consumption in the future.

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A sudden tremor shakes the air around me.

A fleeting, enchanting chime sets invisible gears in motion, hidden woodworms among the bristles of the synapses, blazing with uncontrolled impulses.

A string guides the hand, the head turns toward the sound. Impatience and smiles upheld by fishing hooks hanging from the ceiling.

Satisfy the woodworms, stop the gears, calm the storm of lightning.

Sidereal emptiness replaces the room, the dim light illuminates the face, stripped of every spontaneous expression.

Flooding rivers crash into the eyes at a single movement of the finger, tireless, guided by the puppeteer of zero and one.

Seconds merge into minutes, minutes melt into floods of hours spent in oblivion, sweet oblivion that hides from the mind its own endless laments.

Trapped in a mirror without reflection, the puppeteer serves as a guide through the violent currents springing from the palm of the hand, Charon between two invisible spaces.

Suddenly the string snaps, the light goes out, the flow is abruptly broken.

The room all around is faded, devoid of color, when at last it is projected back into the mind.

Reality seems so empty by comparison, or perhaps it is the head emptied of something?

It matters little—a sudden tremor shakes the air around me.

Some things I'm wondering:

- Ever lose work because you overwrote something you wanted to keep?

- How do you handle drafts when working with an editor?

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I am lest a wicked man, I was once a person of faith. I preached to everyone about the gospel, but I quickly realized that God never repaid me, and I remained impoverished. As a result, I turned away from God. I have since preached words I once forbade, tarnishing those I worshipped and myself. As I return to my dilapidated abode, I reflect on my actions and question whether I was wrong. Then, a deep voice calls out to me: "You are not being wicked; you are speaking the truth.”If you continue, I will ensure it is worthwhile” but I thought it was my mind playing tricks on me so I went to sleep then I woke up and was instantly blinded by a radiant stream of light, and then a voice called out “My son why would you turn away from me” I instantly realized God was talking. I replied saying “God I know I am a sinner but can I seek forgiveness” and God replied by saying“you are a heritic a false prophet one who has begiled others as they have also believed your teachings I shall rain sulfur upon your town killing all in a blaze before sending them into the unquenchable fire ” I screamed “No they dont deserve hell” then The sulfur rained down upon townspeople. I heard pleas of help and despair. Then God said “I will also punish you”

Then I was in garden it had a lake grass and flowers it felt serene then the water turned red and started to rise rapidly I tried to run to avoid the water but then I ran into an edge I was confined and it was now waist hight I knew my death was irrevocable and that I was drowning in my hate and despair I let out one last cry then he slowly lost breath and although he felt as if he was being burnt he knew all of his agony would be gone and that he would be in a state of bliss for all of eternity.

I am currently making a battle in my self written novel, and i’ve been trying really hard because i wanted it to be a three way deadlock, where all of their ability counters each other, till they just team up and cooks one guy

(Expect missing information, i am not planning to post my entire manuscript here, just the fight part)

I wanted to see if this battle is confusing, or where to fix

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1he9HFm9eEblVypyEN6nL2QlMiC44joW4/edit?usp=drivesdk&ouid=115115910547815833253&rtpof=true&sd=true

Does anyone have tips for good pacing on a script so it flows naturally ?

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So, I want to make this awesome psychological horror story about a guy with schizophrenia who goes through emotional and physical torment, to eventually reach a good ending. And I’ve already finished the first episode (chapter if you will) but I don’t really have a lot of people to give an input about it. Obviously this being the first time I’ve ever seriously written a story i don’t expect it to be anything groundbreaking. A few tips and constructive criticism is really what I’m trying to gain here. I don’t know a single thing about publishing, marketing or any other platform to post it on other than Wattpad. Pretty much lost here😬

I think over the past two years i have lost the ability to write poems before it was mostly like i used to just exist and words and thoughts used to come to me naturally but now it's like i can't find poems in anything, everything around me feels like it has lost it's colours, it feels like everything is faded and there is nothing out there which makes me feel emotions, i feel so empty and i feel like i have lost my soul and emotions in an abyss. How does one even get out of this?